[esa-t474] Energy resolution paper, second draft
Matthew Wing
mw at hep.ucl.ac.uk
Tue Jul 20 11:39:15 BST 2010
Hi Alex, Juergen and Michele,
I have read through the paper and append comments below. I think it looks
pretty good and have mostly textual comments--many minor, but some not
completely trivial points and questions.
Cheers,
Matthew.
o l.21. $e^+e^-$" as on l.52.
o l.26. "2006--2007"
o l.28. I am not sure what is meant here. Do you mean that upon exiting
the spectrometer the beam was restored to its original orbit ?
o l.40. "masses" -> "properties"
o l.42. Why do you discuss Higgs direct reconstruction and not a
threshold scan ?
o l.44. brackets around "1--2" and a bit more space around the \cdot.
o l.44-5. I would remove everything after 10-4 and end the sentence
there. I think it's obvious that if you are discussing this uncertainty
you are trying to get it down to an acceptable level.
o l.49. "of achieving"
o l.55-8. A long sentence with hyphens needed before "based", so avoid by
:
"... a non-invasive energy spectrometer using beam position monitors
(BPMs). The proposed setup is similar to that used for ..."
o l.60. "$E_b = 500 GeV", i.e. clear that it is E_b and not \sqrt{s}.
o l.63. "But" -> "However".
o eq.1. "magnet" in roman.
space between "B" and "dl"; also on l.67, l.143.
need to say what "c" and "e" are.
o l.72. "over" -> "to"
o l.93. Remove "by M. Viti"
o l.93. "His" -> "The"
o l.95-6. "The analysis has here been extended by ..."
o l.101. "In this publication, we estimate ..."
o l.102. More space around the dots.
o l.116. "was providing" -> "provided"
o l.120. Remove "unique", as most accelerators are.
o l.125. "energy by controlling"
o l.126. Start a new sentence after "sections" as the sentence is long
and the second part is important.
o l.128. "Fig." -> "fig." as elsewhere.
o Figure 2. Can "x" and "y" be subscripts ? Otherwise you have
"Reading By" which looks odd.
Caption. "diagnostics" (sp.).
o l.161. "... five linac-type BPMs ..."
o l.162. "ones" -> "cavities"
o l.173. "simultaneously" (sp.).
o l.177. "$x$-plane" -> "$x$-direction" !?
o l.179. "talk about" -> "refer to"
o l.183. Remove "from a run".
"zero current".
inverted commas other way round.
o l.184. What does "manipulated" mean ?
o l.187. Comma after "beamline" would help.
o l.188. "Hence only data with magnets ..."
o l.198. Comma after "system" helps.
o l.201. "... allows decoding of both ..."
o l.211. No apostrophes.
o l.211. "... each BPM, $i$, to ...", which if correct, helps.
o Eqs. 2&3. "BPM" in roman.
o l.213. No apostrophes. Could write "$\alpha_{0,i}$ and $\beta_{0,i}$"
o l.214. "called" -> "the"
o l.224. "$-$0.5"
o l.229. "estimated" -> "determined"
o l.232. Why have you assumed "5 mm" ?
o l.234. More space around \cdot.
o l.235-41 should come before l.232-34. And change to :
"The residual is larger than our earlier published value [4] which was
close to 1\,$\mu$m. This is due to the exclusion of BPMs 9, 10 and 11
from this analysis. Therefore, BPM 4 which was previously in the
"centre-of-gravity" here gives the penultimate measurement. Clearly,
the precision of the orbit reconstruction at BPM 4 was affected."
o Figure 3, caption. Remove "prediction" (twice).
o l.246-9. Was there intentional movement of BPM 4 when the magnets were
turned on or did this happen due to the magnets ? Suggest :
- l.246-7. "... BPM 4 also moved in order ..."
- l.247-8. Remove sentence as say in next sentence anyway.
- l.248. "... the Zygo interferometer ..."
- l.249. Remove "was", again depending on intenionality or not.
o Figure 5. Top left label and numbers overlapping.
Caption, line 2. Inverted commas wrong way round.
o l.259. "centre" -> "center" as used Am. sp. elsewhere.
o l.260. Inverted commas wrong way round. Check elsewhere.
o l.266. Where has 1% come from ? This was not mentioned in l.111-9
where the beam properties are discussed. There is just an energy spread
of 0.15% mentioned.
o l.271. Where does 200 MeV come from ?
o l.274-5. "seem" is not a good word. Remind us again of the scan steps.
o l.282. Does 10 MeV include the energy scale factor ?
o l.285. "(Section 3.1)"
o l.282,286. More space around the \cdot.
o l.307. Remove "for"
o Figure 7. Best to have key in same order as points going from top to
bottom, i.e. 4, 1, 2, 3.
o l.325. "is off" -> "differs" or more explanation of "off" needed.
o l.326-8. I am not sure what the sentence says.
o l.328-330. Differences of 0.2-0.4 mT can not explain the 1 mT
differences seen ?
o l.330. "0.2--0.4"
o l.340. Can we "clearly" see a "step-like behavior" ?
o l.354. "results in"
o l.363. No hyphen.
o Figure 9, bottom right. x-axis label needs "MeV"
"MeV" not needed in titles on right.
o Table 1. I do not understand the energy scan numbers ?
Title for resolution, use a "\times" rather than "x".
o l.385. Second "5.5" should be "5.1" ?
o l.393-4. "... create a spurious offset in $y$ due to an offset in $x$.
o l.395. "plane" -> "coordinates" ?
o Figure 10, caption. "x" and "y" in mathmode.
o l.424. "allow for a" -> "give a"
o l.426. Remove "a"
o l.428. Reference missing.
o l.446. "a return"
o l.456,9. No "s" in "ancillary"
o l.458. "in cost"
o l.460. "$B$"
o l.463. "doublets" (sp.)
o l.468-70. Remove sentence as already said.
o l.474. "... were about 300\,nm ..."
o l.475-7. Not sure what this means ? Anyway remove "carefully".
o l.479. "$B$".
o l.485. "revealed that" -> "achieved"
o l.486. "can be achieved by means of" -> "using"
o l.488. Remove "But".
o l.490. "are also required."
o l.492. "allows to reduce" -> "reduces"
o l.495. "millimeter" (sp.)
o l.495. "to operate" -> "operation of"
o l.509. Remove "for".
o l.511-5. This is not discussed before so is a bit out of the blue for
the last part of a paper. Suggest anyway :
"... components would aid inn designing a future device for the next
linear collider." And no more.
> Dear All,
>
> I will be on vacation for the next 3 weeks, so I thought it would be a good
> time to show you guys what Michele, Juergen and I have managed to put
> together so far. Any comments and corrections are very welcome, and thanks to
> those who have already emailed me with some suggestions!
>
> Best regards,
> Alexey
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